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Peter on 24/05/2011 9:05:05 PM |
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RE: Writing Race with Katherine Howell |
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First para of a chapter. It needs editing and tightening. "Jason moved quietly along the dusty track that led to the loggers’ depot. He held his bag tightly to stop the tools within from clanking. He knew he didn’t really need to be quiet; cloud was diffusing what little moonlight there was, and there was nobody around at this hour. What few sounds emanated from Sapphire Bay in the late evening were faint in the distance. The loudest sound was the trudge of Jason’s joggers, but conscious of what he was about to do, even that was scary." |
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